Script: Second Draft

After receiving feedback from several people I decided that it was important to make my script more visual. In my first draft there was very little action, each scene was just a sequence of interview answers and as a result it seemed as though the film may not be that interesting to sit and watch.
In the second draft I inserted four small scenes in which the viewer is able to see examples of what was going on on the set, rather than just hearing about it through the actors, they are able to experience what Hugh is like for themselves. Hopefully these scenes will add to the visual look of the film as well as keeping viewers interested.
I also think that there was an improvement in the script because after I wrote the second draft, a group of students decided that mine was the script that they wanted to turn into a film. I'm interested in seeing the changes that they make to the story and where they go with the style of the film. It will be nice to see how their version compares to how I imagined it turning out.